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            In Barbara Ehrenreich’s article, “Wal-Martian Invasion” she discusses the internal issues behind the company of Wal-Mart.  In her thesis however, she ineffectively presents the many points that she is trying to argue.  The thesis discusses how over half of Wal-Marts own employees can’t afford the companies health insurance, let alone the products that are provided at the store.  In the article, she discusses much more than what she presents in the thesis. She discusses things such as sex discrimination, nonpayment for overtime work, poor management of medical emergencies, and other things.  She skims over all these statements with little interpretation for each, making a majority of her writing just claims, which aren’t backed with good factual evidence.  The thesis does address some of the things in the paper, such as, how many of the employees cannot pay for much of the merchandise at the store because of such low wages.  Ehrenreich uses a life example of a woman worker who can barely afford the shirt she must wear for work.  She discusses the issue of poor workers, but doesn’t go into very much detail, which ultimately weakens her argument.  Another thing the thesis fails to do is inform the reader of how employment problems at the company can be addressed.  In the article, Ehrenreich discusses briefly how Wal-Mart may be able to fix their existing problems. It is fine that she does this, but she doesn’t give the reader any warning in the thesis.  The thesis has potential for laying out some good arguments, but it doesn’t provided a well thought out map of what the article will be discussing.  This aspect might make many readers disagree with the thesis because the writer doesn’t even inform the audience of what is in the rest of the paper, causing questioning and potential distrust in the writers thesis.  It made me question the credibility and the truthfulness of the thesis being presented.  I disagree with this thesis.